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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.

#people #clothes #influence #support
The diagrams illustrate the five different types of
transportation
 that the people, living in Edmonton, prefer and the reasons for using a
car
 in the city. Overall, the public of the city mostly prefers
cars
 over any other means of
transportation
, while
busand
Correct your spelling
bus and
taxi
Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
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 are least preferred by them.
In addition
 to that, the majority of the public drives
cars
 to commute to work and for business. Regarding
transportation
 use, the majority of the public of Edmonton prefers to drive a
car
, with 45% of the population favour
car
 over any other means of
transportation
.
In addition
 to that, a minority of the people uses
buse
Correct your spelling
bus
 and taxi, accounting for 10% each respectively. As for
cars
 in the city, individuals dwelling in Edmonton drive
cars
 for commuting to work, business, and taking children to school, with 55%, 45%, and 40% respectively. while a small proportion of the population uses the
car
 to shop and for leisure activities, with 15% each respectively.
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