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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Otherhowever, think that there are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.s,

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Waste
 of money is thought by certain
people
 for spending to making wedding or birthday parties and other
celebrations
 while others
agur
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argue
 that there are necessary for
citizen
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 who are
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 or the society for making relationship
to
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 other
people
. On one hand, some
celebrations
 are looked
that
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 waste of
the
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time or money due to
person
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people
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 who spend too over necessary for
party
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the party
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, some
people
 may loan for making
party
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a party
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.
Moreover
, more and more teenagers lack
of
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responsibility to think
what
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 is wrong or correct. A good illustration of
this
 is New Year's celebration in Thailand have some
people
 shooting
to
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sky
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by
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no
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think
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 that the bullet will drop on the head of someone.
On the other hand
, other individuals opine
party
 is what
make
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 connection or relationship with others.
In addition
 to
this
, the presence of
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 claimed that
human
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humans
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 are
socialist
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 so certain citizens will find any reason for celebration in order to cater to their happiness.
Furthermore
,
celebrations
 will help to relax
to
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numerous populations who have more pressures. To conclude,
celebrations
 will not be
waste
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 of
the
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time and money if
party
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the party
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 owner
apporpiately
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appropriately
pay
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to
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for
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party
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the party
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.
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