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People believe that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are the most successful. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Today, the proper definition of success is constantly varying. Whether it is those who can make a fortune out of their businesses or
people
 who create socially contributory values that exemplify success is still a matter of controversy. The essay below will shed light on both perspectives and give reasons why the author is in
favor
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 of the latter
one
. On the
one
 hand, it is asserted that the sum
one
 can earn is a reflection of how achieving that person is. In fact, the incomes of well-paid
people
 could be spent on costly purchases,
such
 as impressive accommodations or golden watches, which are believed to signal high attainment in life. In that way,
money
 becomes
one
 of the widely accepted measurements to evaluate the worthiness of an individual.
However
, now that
people
 gradually recognize more aspects of life rather than just financial sufficiency, the importance of
money
 is depleting.
Hence
, in the modern day, affluent
people
 may not be quintessential cases of achievement.
On the other hand
, I strongly opine it is not
money
 that makes up the definition of a successful person but the influence that person brings to the community. To rationalize
this
, gaining in popularity among the young these days is the mindset that the true values of a lifetime do not lie in the achievements within it, but in the heritages that are left behind. Rather than
money
 that could only be individually beneficial and short-lasting, social legacies are shared properties among humankind and would be highly sustainable by being handed over to our descendants. Specifically, teachers and scientists may not make as much out of their careers as entrepreneurs. Still, they are all
honorable
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 role models in society for the meaning of their lives to
others’
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, which particularly are, for the former, advancements that improve our living conditions and for the latter ones, the knowledge delivered to our future leaders that would accompany them for long in life. All in all, as the world is changing, the most exemplary figures of success are now
people
 who generate 
ontributory
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contributory
contributors
, far-reaching and long-lasting fruitions to society, particularly scientists and teachers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial prosperity
  • capitalizing
  • luxury travel
  • exclusive experiences
  • contributions to society
  • humanitarian workers
  • lasting impact
  • highly subjective
  • cultural, societal, and personal values
  • comfort and security
  • deeper personal satisfaction
  • holistic understanding
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