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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

#people #places #visit #food
We can broadly categorise the population into two main segments: the
first
 segment of
people
 are comfortable with living in the same place, eating the same types of food, and having a career that involves pretty much doing the same thing and taking almost no risks, while others are completely the opposite who find the meaning of soul through peril and
challenges
 and are not afraid of trying new things. Personally, I like to take the danger, face
challenges
 and enjoy the diversity of the world through travelling and favour the
second
 group of community.
People
 who avoid threats or scarcely try new stuff are comfortable with the lifestyle they already have. They do not want to make
life
 complicated by taking on new
challenges
 that might bring misery or dissatisfaction to their
life
.
Such
people
 are often contended with whatever they have and wish to stay in their comfort zone. Since they are afraid of failure, their achievement is
also
 limited. We can see many crowds around us who fall in
this
 category, who, despite seeing potential in a new career, never dare to change their existing job or even detest the idea of trying new food.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 who believe that change is constant and that taking on
challenges
 is something that makes
life
 thrilling and enjoyable. They embrace new ideas, travel to difficult places, try new food, experience diversity of
life
 and culture, and get easily bored doing the same thing for a long. These
people
 take opportunities that bring success. But
such
 success is not always guaranteed as failure can
also
 befall them. I
also
 know
such
people
, and I consider myself one of them. They are often the trailblazer and inventors, builders and creators of new things and ideas.
For instance
, despite having a good job in a multinational company, one of my cousins started a boutique business. No one
initially
 supported his move, but now he is so successful that many others cite him as an example of accomplishment. In conclusion, being in the comfort zone, doing familiar things and taking minimal risks may guarantee comfort and stability in
life
 but real achievement and great inventions and ideas come from taking risks and embracing
challenges
. I am always in favour of the
second
 type of attitude that makes
life
 worth living.
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