For some people, shopping is not just about buying what is necessary, but is a form of entertainment. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The diagram illustrates the
number
of
children
born to
women
, who were living in Australia since 1981, aged between 40 and 44 years. Overall, almost 16% of the
women
have no
children
at present, whereas about 8.50% of them had no offspring in 1981.
Furthermore
, lesser
women
nowadays conceive four or more
children
, with only 11% as compared to 27.60% in 1961. In the
first
half of the
period
, the
number
of
women
with no offspring rose to 9.70% in 1986, increasing more than 1%, whereas that with four or more offspring declined sharply in the
period
in question to 18.90%.
Furthermore
, the
number
of
women
rearing 2
children
has increased by merely 7%. In the
second
half of the
period
, the
number
of
women
with two
children
experienced no change during the
period
, while that with no
children
rose marginally in 2006 at approximately 16%.
In addition
to that, the
number
of
women
rearing two or more offspring declined during the
period
, with 33% on average as compared to 58% in 1986.
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