In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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It is known, nowadays, that youngsters try to be independent of their parents,

therefore

, once they graduate from high school they start to live alone or with friends. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will elaborate on both the positive and negative effects of starting adult

life

from an early age.

To begin

with, people who leave their parents' homes early obtain a unique skill set that will help them in real

life

. In fact, since the young members of the public live for themselves, they have to focus on

such

important aspects of mature

life

like money and house renting.

Moreover

, they begin more experienced and ready for real

life

consequently

, they get a must-have skillset at

such

early age.

For example

, If I had left my parent's place just after my graduation, I would not have taken my father's money for granted and I would have begun more independent from him.

On the other hand

, youngsters, especially teenagers, sometimes are just not ready to face real

life

's challenges. As long as they live with their parents, they do not pay attention to different adults' problems.

That is

, they just do not know some vital rules for living alone or even with friends.

For instance

, a big cluster of young society in Kazakhstan starts to live independently just because of thoughts that

this

will make them cooler.

However

, they usually suffer from a lack of money, which forces them to leave universities or colleges in order to have yet another part-time job. In conclusion, I would say that despite the fact that there are undoubtedly some advantages to living independently

such

as getting permanent skills, young people

also

face the issues that they are not fully ready.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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287 words

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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that a country’s wealth is dependant on the health of its citizens. Other people argue that education is a better indicator of a nation’s wealth and well-being. What is your opinion? What are some other factors that contribute to the growth and prosperity of a country?

It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.