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Nowadays an increasing number of people change their career and place of residence several times during their life. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The pie charts illustrate how
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 is consumed for distinct aims in six regions of the world. In general,
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 consumption in North
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 of
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, in other regions, agriculture had the most percentage of
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. North
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 used a significant proportion of
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 section. Almost half and more than half of the percentage of
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 are used in
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 in North
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 by 39 and 32
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 for North
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 in these two regions
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 by far has the most
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 in these nations are not significant.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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