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Nowadays an increasing number of people change their career and place of residence several times during their life. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The pie charts illustrate how
water
 is consumed for distinct aims in six regions of the world. In general,
although
 the most proportion of
water
 consumption in North
America
 and
Europe
 is
in
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purpose
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 of
industry
, in other regions, agriculture had the most percentage of
water
usage
. North
America
 and
Europe
 used a significant proportion of
water
usage
 in the
industry
 section. Almost half and more than half of the percentage of
water
 are used in
industry
 in North
America
 and
Europe
, respectively. Agriculture
water
 consumption
as
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 the
second
usage
 by 39 and 32
percent
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 for North
America
 and
Europe
, respectively. Domestic
usage
 is not
considerable
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 in these two regions
in contrast
 to other sections.
On the other hand
, agriculture in Africa, Central Asia, South East Asia and South
America
 by far has the most
water
usage
in contrast
 to North
America
 and
Europe
 by more than at least 71
percent
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.
Industry
 and domestic
usage
 in these nations are not significant.
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