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Globalisation has highlighted the need for international communication.It is iften argued that english should be a compulsory subject for all school children around the world. Other argue that this would do more harm than good. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Human beings are called the most intelligent animal because we have been able to develop
languages
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 to communicate amongst ourselves. There are hundreds of
languages
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 present across the world,
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, recently, the need for
common
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a common
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 international
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 is being highlighted everywhere. Some believe that
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english
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 should be made compulsory in schools, but many
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otherwise
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. In
this
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 mandatory and will explain why the positives
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outweighs
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outweigh
 the drawbacks.
People
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 who are against making a common international
language
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 compulsory in schools
fears
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 that it will make our local
language
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 obsolete. Certainly, they are right in thinking so because wherever
people
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 have adopted
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english
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 in their regular life, the use of
local
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the local
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language
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 has reduced drastically. In some parts of India,
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, speaking
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english
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the english
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language
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have
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 become a status symbol and
people
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 speaking
local
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language
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 are considered
as
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backward
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 community. Clearly, a common international
language
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 is a threat to all the local
languages
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.
On the other hand
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, in
this
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 era of globalisation, it is
also
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 important for any country that their
people
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 should have the
language
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 skills to be employable in any part of the world. There is no doubt
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 the fact that
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 with
better
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 hold
on
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english
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the english
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language
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 are the
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ones
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once
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one
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 who get the best jobs.
In addition
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 to
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,
such
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people
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 can live anywhere in the world based on their
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. Nowadays,
for example
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, many
people
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 are migrating to
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english
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 speaking countries like Canada or Australia, for
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better living standards.
Such
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 benefits of making
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 compulsory in schools definitely
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 its negatives. In conclusion, just like two sides of a coin, making
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english
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 mandatory for school children has its own set of advantages and disadvantages.
However
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, if governments can take some measures to preserve the local
languages
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, learning an international
language
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 will surely be a boon for any country.
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