Crimes and other kinds of information on the television and newspaper have bad consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

I am more inclined to think that not everything must
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shown on TV or given
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newspaper
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because our life is very crowded and stressed without it.It is good that people
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and
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the rights
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rights
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to be informed about news,about what is happening in the world,but producers must make it as
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professionally
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professional
,to not affect
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people's emotions and
physology
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physiology
psychology
.I think so mass media has
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effect
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people
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and must
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to have health and
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adequate
social.Crime and
informatiin
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information
like
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everybody scared and it will give
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result. As far as I imagine ,mass media have
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function ,and it could be used to have
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social
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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