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Extreme sports like skiing, rafting, diving should be banned. Agree or disagree? Argumentative / persuasive/ opinionated type essay.

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Extreme
sports
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 are known for their dangers to human lives, in many ,cases these
sports
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cause
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 severe to fatal injuries which could be considered as something to ban the sport for.
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 could be reasonable as other things in the world have been banned for their dangers. I do not believe
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 should be the case, since banning it will only
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 there to be more problems within the justice system than with
people
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 actually doing these specific
sports
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.
People
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 enjoy
sports
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 that create
adrenalin
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 which causes it to be the majority favourite sport.
Adrenalin
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 has a known effect on
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's ability to create fun activities for
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. To ,some
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 rush of
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 from these dangerous
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 can be something that satisfies their needs. Because of ,
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 we need certain
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 which are dangerous to be able to satisfy the needs of individuals in our society. The creation of
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 can
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 be something
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 proven to allow
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 to let go of stress, which improves mental health As we know from other bans in the world
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 as the abortion ban in the USA, the only thing
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 will
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 is that these
sports
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 will be more dangerous as there would not be any instructors who could help
people
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 achieve their enjoyment. Since we are talking about a ban
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 would mean that it would be illegal to do
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sports
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, and as we should know
people
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 will continue doing things that create
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 bursts and enjoyment regardless of whether it is illegal to do so, the only thing that would differentiate is that the possible injuries from these
sports
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 will increase as there will be no one to help and instruct the
people
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. In conclusion, even if a sport is said to be extreme, we should be personally responsible for what we do with
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sports
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. It should not be banned as it will
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people
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 to still do it but
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 time without any instruction or help that would allow them to be safer in doing so.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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