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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, youth are spending the majority of their free
time
 in shopping malls. It is feared that
this
 might create a negative impact on society. I would partially agree with
this
 statement.
Besides
 having negative impacts of wasting their leisure
time
 in shopping malls, there are
also
 some pros to relaxing in leisure
time
. I would like to cite both pros and cons in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the most important thing to relax in the shopping centre is to get rid of mental stress . The majority of people have very little leisure
time
 and in the remaining
time
, they continuously focus on work and go through a lot of pressure.
Hence
, spending free
time
 in the malls can make them entertained and make them fresh.
However
, if a person has any relaxation
time
 they can sit with the family at home peacefully and enjoy spending moments with them rather than roaming the market and streets.
For instance
, a recent study has shown that there is a lack of family bonding among people at present due to the wastage of their precious minimalistic free space. Spending present together can build a great relationship and trust among one other in a family and
also
 can guide you with a proper solution to the problems you are facing currently.
Finally
, I would like to conclude that it is an individual choice to decide where to spend
time
 and with whom but I would suggest spending
time
 with family rather than roaming the streets or plaza
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