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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#information #features #comparisons
The graph shows the percentages of smoking
adults
 and high
school
students
 as a function of time from 1965 to 2020. At
first
 glance, it can be seen, that no data is available for
students
 before 1990. From 1990 to 1995 a 15% rise
of
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 high
school
students
 that smoke can be observed, in order to have 35% of all
students
 smoking in 1995. But from that year on to 2003
there
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os
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is
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 a very quick decrease in the
percentages
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percentage
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 of smoking high
school
students
. Compared to these findings,
adults
 have a very high percentage at the start of the study, in 1965. At that time around 43% of the
adults
 in the US are smoking cigarettes. But from the beginning of
this
 survey until the very end of it, there is a slow but steady decrease in
adults
 smoking cigarettes, so
that
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in 2015 there are only around 20% left. From 2005 to 2015 the number and the decrease for
adults
 and high
school
students
is
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 very similar.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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