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In many countries, people are changing career with increasing number. What are the reasons and do you think it is negative or positive development?

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Nowadays, with increased access to the internet and educational resources,
people
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 are changing their
careers
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 at a never seen rate. I think that
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 development is a good
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 in most
people
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's lives, but
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 might have negative connotations, and will explain the reasons in
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 essay.
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 off, the age when most
people
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 choose their
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 is too young, most are out of high school and entering college in their teenage years,
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 they might not have sufficient information do an informed choice,
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,
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 of accepting a job where they do not feel fulfilled, they can take the steps to enter in a field where they feel happier. I, myself have changed my area of work, coming from an engineering career where I did not feel motivated to an academic career in economics, where I feel that I am able to reach the goals I set for myself .
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, some jobs
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 can be difficult to find employment and the ability to
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careers
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 could help some individuals to keep a steady stream of income for themselves. Take as an example the increase in IT jobs in Brazil, most professionals come from fields that are not related to anything with computers. But, with the increase of resources available to learn programming and how easy is to
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 jobs, they are able to get better incomes and results in their new profession. At
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, some
people
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 might
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 their
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 just because they can,
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 might be negative because most work done in labour economics show that workers see an increase in their wages in the
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 10 years in their occupations,
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, the continuous
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 of areas could have a negative effect income-wise. In conclusion,
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 should have the freedom to decide what is better for them and what will make them happier, there might be negative effects on their wages, but if it brings more fulfilment to their life I see these movements as a positive
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job displacement
  • job insecurity
  • fulfilling
  • meaningful
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • career options
  • opportunities
  • acquire new skills
  • knowledge
  • rapidly changing economy
  • social media
  • role models
  • entrepreneurship
  • self-employment
  • COVID-19 pandemic
  • passions
  • interests
  • instability
  • uncertainty
  • workforce
  • career planning
  • professional development
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