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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option

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A group of
people
 considered that the best way to connect
people
 in different countries and ages is
music
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through music
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. I totally agree with
this
 viewpoint due to the benefits song bring to the current life.
First
 of all,
music
 has existed for thousand
years
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of years
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,
thus
, it will be
the
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a
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 useful tool to transmit culture between different generations. Difficulties in life, poverties, and wars were described carefully through
music
;
moreover
, the diversity of instruments, lyrics and melody showed the creativity of humanization at that time. Each country has their own dense history of
music
;
therefore
, listeners
at
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of
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 different ages can
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feel
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fell
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feel
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 the meaning of the songs.
For example
, “Cung Dinh Hue” one kind of Royal
music
 has been recognized by UNESCO as an intangible cultural heritage. If foreign
people
 listened to
this
 performance, they can
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feel
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fell
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feel
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the
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traditional
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traditions
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 of
Vietnamese
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the Vietnamese
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,
then
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and then
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 understand more about the culture and history.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argued that
music
 for youth is not suitable for
elder
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the elder
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;
furthermore
, the lyrics of
this
 kind of sound sometimes make no sense.
This
 argument is true;
however
, the reasons why adults dislike young
music
 are not mean that it has no meaning. Each person will have their own
favorite
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favourite
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 type of melody, there will always exist lyrical
music
,
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to connect
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connect
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connecting
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 with listeners of different ages.
For instance
, Adele, a famous
America
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American
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 singer,
who
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has received 2 Oscars for her excellent sound. Her songs have a catchy vibe,
also
, the lyrics are very meaningful, so both younger and elder
people
 could be addicted to her compounds. In conclusion, there is no discussion about
music
 being
a
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powerful to transmit
traditional
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tradition
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 and
connecting
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connect
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people
. As well, governments should invest and encourage creators
make
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to make
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music
 with the cultural identity of their country.
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