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Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outlook. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #function #outlook
While designing a building, two of the major components that an architect keeps in mind, are
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 utilities and
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 view of the building. In
opinion
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 of some individuals, architects should put more emphasis on the functionality of a building
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 to
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 appearance of it. I completely agree with
this
 notion because users of the building will be benefited from the functionality of the building which will eventually keep them using the space in the long run. To elaborate
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 viewpoint, it has been observed that
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 of a building is the most important aspect of a building.
This
 is because, people who are going to purchase or rent a building, will always look for suitable space to meet their
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.
For example
, if a family has a disabled or old member, a building which has ramps or elevators will be
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preferable
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 a building which does not have any.
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, designers of
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the building
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building
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 should give ultimate importance
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usefulness
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 of the building while making the blueprint.
However
, the outer design of the building is
also
 a significant point because people are attracted to a building at
first
 by looking at its outside ambient.
For instance
, the parliament house of Bangladesh is one of the most visited tourist places
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 the country due to its unique design.
Hence
, the outlook of a building is a valuable aspect
in addition
 to its purpose. To conclude, in my opinion, it is important that architects design a building in a way which enhances
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 utility of that building in
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 place and
then
 consider
to beautify
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 it to increase
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 value of the building.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetics
  • Architecture
  • Cost-effective
  • Design principles
  • Eco-friendly
  • Facade
  • Infrastructure
  • Innovative
  • Landmark
  • Sustainability
  • Urban planning
  • Utilitarian function
  • Visual appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic development
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