Some people think the spread of multinational companies and globalization produce positive outcomes for everyone.do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, it is easy to see the extension of multinational
firms
in the world and their globalization
provide
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positive results for individuals. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
view. It is often thought that globalization
improve
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individuals
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income when working in
a multinational
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multinational companies
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companies
. In fact,
the
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global
companies
offer good salaries and
allowance
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to
the
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employees.
Therefore
, an individual's lifestyle can improve
more
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quality.
On the other hand
, the local
companies
might not offer a high standard of salary in general.
Furthermore
,
the
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global
firms
have good
structure
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and
organization
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organizations
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to motivate
the
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employees.
For instance
, the employees can work and be well-trained by
the
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global
firms
for their career path.
Moreover
,
the
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multinational
companies
often contribute to
charity
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activities in the local
market
where they invest to spread company names to local citizens and the local authorities.
Thus
, the citizens could receive support in
scholarship
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scholarships
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or economic support. By contracts, if the authority allows numerous global
firms
to invest and run business in the local country. It will result in high competition between local
companies
and global
companies
in the
market
. the local
companies
' position will take place by the multinational
firms
on
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the
labor
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market
or economic
market
. In conclusion, while there will be relevant negative results in the spread of multinational
firms
, I still agree that there are numerous positive outcomes
such
as improving
individuals
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income and
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the company's
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company's
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companies'
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contribution to
charity
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charitable
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activities in the local
market
.
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