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You bought a laptop while you were travelling abroad. When you reached your native country you realised that some items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the representative of the company. In your letter, give details of the laptop and from where you bought it explain what has happened say what you want him/her to do about it

#laptop #country #items #box #representative #company
Dear Apple , I am
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 bought from Jeddah , Saudi
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 when
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 was visiting my brother
last
 week, from one of the famous electronic shops called Extra.
However
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didnt
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didn't
 open the laptop until
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 reached Egypt after my vacation was over .
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Unfortunately
Unfortunetly
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Unfortunately
,
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 was
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shocked
schocked
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shocked
 when
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 didn't find
the
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either the main
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charging
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although
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 read the manual online before purchasing the laptop and it mentioned that both accessories are included. I really need the charger cable and the plug since
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 will not be able
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 the computer , rather than
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 very expensive here in my country due to high taxes . Please
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 need a
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compensation
 about
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 issue as soon as possible and how you will deliver the missing items in my product. I recommend you contact my brother in Jeddah to come and pick it up.
Finally
 am waiting for an instant response and confirmation to send you my
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contacting
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 details . Thanks in Advance ,
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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