Many people believe that the age of shopping malls is coming to an end, soon online shopping will completely replace retail stores. Explain the reasons for this and give your own opinion.

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recent years, individuals

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to be more advantaged with the appearance of the internet, and nowadays is the era of cyberspace. The way of shopping has changed from physical to virtue via online shopping. There are some considerations that shopping malls will become a past, and virtue shopping will utterly replace retail

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. In my opinion, online shopping won'

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be able to fully substitute actual

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, and it will be discussed in my later essay.

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, virtue shops can'

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provide physical examination during the shopping. It can only be judged by photos and descriptions that the seller provided.

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, some people tend to determine the quality of fabric and the actual appearance when wearing clothes.

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, it may be a scam on the internet, as the photos or description don'

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do it justice which could be below the expectation. So, online shopping can'

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completely replace retail

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as it can'

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fulfil the requirements above.

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, there are a few benefits of online shopping, the most beneficial fact is time-saving. Shopping in a mall, often

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amount of moments in order to achieve satisfaction.

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, an individual has to shop in more than one store

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to get their most favourable item.

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, online shopping gives a hand in analysing personal favour and proposing some recommendations that save a lot of time. In the end, online shopping prevents people from wasting more age as time is precious. In conclusion,

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online shopping provides a faster route to complete the shopping list, retail shops

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more details way as the object can be physically contacted. I believe that retail

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will remain

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online

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since both have different advantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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