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Some people claim that corporal punishment is a good way to raise children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people from all walks of life believe that body
punishment
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 could be a fabulous
way
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 for
children
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 to be grown up in the right direction. In my opinion, nowadays it is not a very useful
way
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 for parents to foster their
children
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. So, I completely disagree. If anyone punishes their
children
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 with a beating by kinds of stuff or hand,
children
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 might grow up with the sense of being useless and
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 may cause depression in the long-term using that as the
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 to treat bad behaviour of the younger.
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, the more body
punishment
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, the less obedience by
children
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. Due to, the high intelligence of the new generation they are unlikely to follow the orders which are associated with force and bullying.
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, they might listen to you, only if you talk with them clearly and raise their awareness about their problem.
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, growing up with corporal
punishment
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 could always have bad effects on
children
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’s social life. It is clear fostering a child is an additional responsibility for parents and
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 task forces them to choose the
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 of
punishment
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 for the child’s bad actions.
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, lack of experience in
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 issue put them in the wrong
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, which is body
punishment
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. So, each action has corporal
punishment
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 is a spoiled thought that parents could put in their
children
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’s minds and they exactly destroy their social personalities through
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. To put it all in a nutshell, using corporal
punishment
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 is useless these days as a
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 to cure bad behaviours, actions, and habits in
children
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.
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