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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#believe #language #communication #outweigh
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people
 believe that there is a need
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a new
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language
 within
international
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the international
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 community for interaction. There are few benefits
for
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 inventing a new
language
, whereas there are multiple issues, which can be raised based on the same decision. In my
opinion
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 there are more pros as compared to
the
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cons.
This
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for
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new
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a new
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 communication
language
. Reasonable and beneficial change is extremely important in society. There are multiple issues, which can be faced across the globe in case of
new
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a new
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 international
language
 is introduced.
Firstly
,
process
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 is extremely slow to understand the
language
 which included writing, reading, speaking and listening, especially
adults
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for adults
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, who will consume time to upgrade their
language
 skills.
This
 will downgrade buying power, as
less
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people
 will interact due to limited
language
 skills, which
further
 impact
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 of the country. As per the survey in the New York
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economy
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the economy
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 of
few
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a few
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 countries in the
last
 decade declines, because of no understanding of
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new international
language
.
Secondly
, there are
less
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 social interactions for
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 years in public, which leads to
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human depression in
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society because, human is a social
animal
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animals
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 and always need some
language
 to interact
within
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with
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 their friends, relatives, and professional work.
For instance
,
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countries
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country's
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 depression rate
is
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increased
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 as they start adapting
new
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to new
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 international
language
.
This
 shows that
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 there are
repercussion
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repercussions
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 faced by human
being
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beings
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 due to
new
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a new
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language
 introduction in society. On the other side, few benefits are noticed for
new
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a new
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language
 in case
first
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the first
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 international
language
 is not understandable in some countries. It can save
people
 in case of urgencies and using
new
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newly
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 invented
language
 which is understandable by both
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parties. It will allow
the
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people
 to communicate.
For
example
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 Many
Interpreter
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 demands were decreased due to
invention
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 of
new
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a new
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language
. In conclusion,
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 of
new
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a new
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language
 needs to evaluate based on pros and cons. I believe that there are more disadvantages
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 advantages based. It is based on the
people
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people's
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 decision to invent a new international
language
 for communication.
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