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A museum near your homw is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the musesum. describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you in regard to the available position at the
museum
. My name is Jimena and at the moment I am studying at "Art University", the one which is located next door to the
museum
. Despite it
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 an unpaid job offer, I am very interested in working at the
museum
 because I am studying to become an artist, and
this
 position would help me to increase my knowledge and develop my skills.
Furthermore
, I believe I am the right person for that position, as I have been studying art for the
last
 five years,
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would be able to manage the tour guides around the
museum
.
In addition
, I heard that the
museum
 is thinking about offering a painting course once a month and it would be amazing for me to be teaching different ways of
paintings
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 with acrylic, I am deeply
aknowledged
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acknowledged
on
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 that area. Regarding my availability, I would be available to start working in two weeks. I have to study in the afternoons but I have all my mornings free. I am looking forward to hearing from you back, I would very much appreciate it if you could give me the
chane
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chance
 to work there. Yours
faitfhully
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faithfully
, Jimena
Submitted by jimeilaria on

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accuracy
Acknowledge is misspelled as 'aknowledged'. The correct spelling should be 'acknowledged'.
accuracy
Ensure consistency in formal language usage. Instead of 'chane', the correct spelling is 'chance'.
task achievement
Try to add more specific examples of how your art studies have prepared you for the tasks at the museum. This will further strengthen your task achievement score.
task achievement
Excellent introduction and purpose of the letter is clearly stated.
coherence cohesion
Logical and clear structure, the letter flows seamlessly from one idea to the next.
task achievement
Good use of formal writing tone appropriate for the context of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single idea clearly and effectively.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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