It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Its generally believed by many people in general and parents in specific that
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with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social
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will affect negatively on
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. But, from my perspective,
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idea is misunderstood by many,
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is why many experts from teachers and
children
behavior
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specialist
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came out and support the idea of diversity in schools.
Firstly
, having
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mix in
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class will aware
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to be more open to
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each other no matter what the level difference.
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, smart people will be a support system for other
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by keeping their friends motivated and trying to be much better and be all equivalent and work as a team.
Additionally
,
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if
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completed by
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awareness will reflect beneficially on
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to tolerate and accept each other.
Secondly
, a wide range of talents will raise the competition between
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and some take it too
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and got hurt by not being number one in class. Some
kids
are jealous
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will put them under pressure which is not good.
Moreover
, in
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case, parents can play important role in supporting their
children
no matter what the result is and push them to love themselves and accept the competition by taking it as a game to prove the best every time in a good way. To conclude, it is a must to have
this
diversity in schools to arise a level of respect and tolerance and avoid bullying between
children
. So absolutely, I disagree that
this
mix will affect negatively on
kids
,
in contrast
making separation will grow a generation
that is
null in acceptance
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes Inclusivity
  • Fosters Equality
  • Appreciate Diversity
  • Equitable Society
  • Broad Perspective
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • Real-World Diversity
  • Navigate
  • Global Society
  • Strive for Improvement
  • Unique Talents
  • Healthy Competitive Spirit
  • Reduce Social Inequality
  • Access to Resources
  • Empathy
  • Social Skills
  • Communication
  • Teamwork
  • Conflict Resolution
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