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Many people feel that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

#people #media #coverage
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It is believed that
media
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 is the fourth pillar of the country.
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, it is extremely important
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people
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 with quality content. It is agreed that organs of public opinion become more biased nowadays.
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 essay
outline
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main
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the main
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 reasons and ways of solving
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this
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 issue. Many
people
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 claim that various broadcasts become more focused on increasing the TRP and giving false rumours .
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,under the pressure from powerful corporate owners, they may occasionally conceal a valuable or crucial message. Aside from that, they don't give the
people
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 full
news
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 and messages.
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, India created a
law
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 pertaining to farmers. In fact, the
law
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 was against the farmer but the
news
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 said that the
law
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 was in favour of the farmer.
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,
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television has covered
up
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the
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 story of farmer demonstrations
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 of pressure from some businessmen. So it is a good example of information quality
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provided
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is provided
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 by mass
media
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 to
public
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the public
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.
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, there are some possible solutions to eliminate
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 issue. The most powerful adjustments can be done by
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the government
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. The authority can adopt specific laws which could forbid
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 that gives false information. In case of violation of the
law
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, the channels must be blocked, the owners must pay a fine, or other forms of punishment must be applied.
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, a lot of technology is used by humans nowadays , including the
internet
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.
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, the
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also
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 might be a powerful tool in
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the fight
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 against low-quality mass
media
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. So,
community
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the community
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 can be fully aware of fake announcements through the use of the
internet
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.
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,
people
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 can send
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a petition
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petition
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petitions
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 for relevant laws through the
Internet
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 ,
it
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 will help officials to be
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 of
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. To summarise, some corporate owners started to pollute the
media
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 space and some channels become concentrated only on TRP.
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,
people
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 become felt that mass
media
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 provides
news
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 in
favour
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their favour
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 of them ,but not for
community
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the community
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. But it can be solved by
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the government
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, they should take some serious
step
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 to stop
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. And of course by
people
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 , who can notify officials in time . After
thorough
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a thorough
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 analysis
on
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this
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 subject, it is predicted that these issues can be solved easily just by some smart decisions.
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