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People buy a product if it fulfills their needs; there is no need for advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with is?

#people #product #advertisement
It is widely believed those purchase goods according to their needs only regardless of
advertisements
. But I completely disagree with
this
 statement. In my opinion, I strongly believe that
advertisements
 play a vast character in people’s buying habits.
Advertisements
 bring advantages not only for customers but
also
 for sellers.
Firstly
,
advertisements
 help buyers to know about a wide range of products currently available in the market.
Moreover
, they give the opportunity for them to know the differences between distinct brands by comparing with the information provides through the
advertisements
.
In addition
, they will make aware consumers, of the prices prior visiting to a store which helps them to save a lot of time.
For example
, if an individual visits a shop and makes comparisons of the prices among different brands, it will take a lot of time.
Secondly
,
advertisements
also
 are beneficial for people since they get the chance to know about special seasonal offers, mega sales, special price drops, etc.
Besides
, they will be able to compare those offers among different brands and can choose the convenient decision beforehand.
For example
, some products will give better price-downs than others. So buyers can straightly go for the biggest offer. Even though there are
such
 plus points,
advertisements
 do induce people’s urgency and desire by targeting their psychology. To conclude, many of us think that people will buy products only considering their actual needs, but not depending on their
advertisements
. But, I fully do not go with the proponents considering the variety of pros that
advertisements
 bring to society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • awareness
  • functionality
  • existence
  • potential customers
  • demand
  • features
  • benefits
  • purchase decisions
  • perceived value
  • necessity
  • brand image
  • product perception
  • differentiate
  • crowded market
  • persuade
  • emotional responses
  • connection
  • multiple options
  • word-of-mouth
  • social media influence
  • marketing campaigns
  • positive word-of-mouth
  • inform
  • drive purchase decisions
  • superior
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