Some people think developing countries should invite foreign companies to open branches, offices and factories to promote their economies. Others say that they should keep the foreign companies out and depend more on their own local companies. Describe both views.

Nowadays, some individuals believe that the best way to boost economies in developing
countries
is attracting international companies’
investment
, while other
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of society
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that it is better to rely on
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domestic companies. I agree with the former one
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because many developing
countries
are not wealthy enough to depend on themselves. On the one hand, it can be argued that while inviting international companies’
investment
might bring
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light to its financial circumstances, it can
also
cause some issues.
Firstly
,
construction
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of branches,
offices
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might have a detrimental impact on natural resources offered by their environment.
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, because of
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foreign business’
investing
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and
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tourism development, trees and birds are threatened with extinction
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Malaysia, a place with rich natural resources.
Secondly
,
this
can certainly harm the culture and history of
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developing
countries
. Namely, the younger generation might abandon the traditional way of life and embrace a damaging culture of accumulating wealth and possessions.
On the other hand
, choosing to invest in developing
countries
have a plethora of advantages
such
as the possibility to reach millions of consumers and low-cost
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, which has long been a very important element to consider when making global capital
investment
decisions. Foreign companies can save more money on employment and meanwhile unemployment rate in developing
countries
decrease.
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, there are many international organizations
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and build their branches, offices and factories in India, which offers the most competitive
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costs in Asia, with the national-level minimum wage at around US$ 2.16 per day. In conclusion, it seems to me that the merits of applying foreign business
investment
to developing
countries
are more significant than only
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on their own domestic companies.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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