Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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is true that in the

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decades, the

tuition

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cost for tertiary education is increasing year by year, some people believe that

students

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should afford

tuition

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fees by themselves

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of totally relying on

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supports

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. In my opinion,

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partly agree with

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view that

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should be held accountable for their

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expenses but

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government

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should offer some help. On the one hand, if

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pay the

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totally by themselves, it would bring both

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and disadvantages.

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of all, it indeed

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financial burden. The budget of

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is limited,

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the limited budget

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could invest

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other

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industries

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industries

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as infrastructure and

healthcare

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system.

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, it is argued that

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motion

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would be highly strengthened since they have to pay a large

amount

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of fees to obtain access.

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However

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the downside should not be neglected. Paying

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fees all by

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will

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pressure

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pressure

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especially

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especially

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from low

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socioeconomic

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economic

status who may lose the opportunity to acquire higher education and break the cycle of poverty through academic performance.

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, I believe the

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should provide educational

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for

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would be a good method to cover the disadvantages. In

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way, all

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could receive equal access to higher education regardless of their current economic

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the authority does not shoulder too much financial burden beyond its capacities.

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, with a group of well-educated people, these

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will be

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skilled workforce to support the development of various industries and the national strength will be enhanced. In conclusion, I believe

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of totally relying on the

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students

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to pay

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, the

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should provide loans for

students

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who are supposed to pay back after they graduated.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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295 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

bear the cost
tuition fees
financial management
taxpayer burden
public finances
allocate resources
social inequality
socio-economic disparities
access to higher education
long-term economic benefits
educated workforce
earning potentials
investment vs expense

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Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

‘The best way to educate children is by using the Internet in every lesson.’ To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

Some parents prefer to stay in care homes after their retirement instead of staying with their children. Why is this happening? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

some people say that music can bring people of different cultures and ages together. to what extend do you agree or disagree?