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Some believe that in many countries, the investment of public money in arts can be justified. Others think that the government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The
government
's expenditure can be a controversial issue in many countries. Some suggested that it should allocate more resources to
art
development
 meanwhile other argued that
health
 and education are more crucial and worth spending more on these issues. In
this
 essay, both sides' opinions will be discussed.
Art
development
 can be a profitable investment for the country.
Government
 invests in
art
development
 like promoting
art
 in society and encouraging various
art
 industries to create
art
 pieces
such
 as movies, music or advertisement is an effective way to improve the international image.
For instance
, in some countries
government
 provide low-interest-rate loans for movie production companies to encourage them to produce more high-quality movie. Some kinds of movies can generate enormous profits or even get awards worldwide like the Oscars. Once the movie succeeds and becomes famous, it can attract more tourists to visit a country like Korea, one of the examples that have great success in entertainment and it has a significant impact on k-pop music fans over the world to visit Korea every year.
Consequently
, investing in arts can generate more income in the foreseeable future.
However
, some argued that
health
 and education issues should be prioritised. Since they are the basic needs of human beings.
Government
 has the responsibility to fulfil civil needs and based on
this
 allocate the resource. Providing free
health
 care and tuition for children and improving the medical systems are crucial issues for society. If the
government
 neglect these basic request of the people, it can stir up a huge controversy and stimulate protests or demonstrations. In conclusion, It cannot be denied that the
government
 should put citizens' needs priority
such
 as
health
 care and education.
However
, I believe that for society's future
development
, it is
also
 important to invest money in arts to generate more income to cover the expenditure as long as the
government
's financial status is stable and has a surplus
then
 it is well worth investing in
art
development
.
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