Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of elderly
people
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inability to apply for the same jobs as
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generation. In
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I am going to present the possible outcomes of
this
issue and their effect and give possible suggestions to fix
this
problem. One of the first things we need to take into consideration is that
majority
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of students nowadays are highly knowledgeable in technology,
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makes it easier for them to apply for a job. Aged
people
, who don’t have much experience in working with technology are left behind,
as a result
, many
people
are getting jobless and have to barely make ends meet.
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, I have heard from my
parents
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friend, who is a teacher, that insufficient knowledge
in
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computers had it’s real consequences during the years of
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, as technologies
where
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used every day and
people
in their
50
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50s
had a hard time trying to learn new skills.
Although
,
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the situation is global, there are still some solutions government could take to prevent it. Supporting elderly
people
financially would help them to find better living conditions and to pay for some extra lessons to improve their knowledge.
Also
,
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people
to learn new skills by giving them acceptable information resources and
technics
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. For instance, during
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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pandemic,
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many schools have given teachers equipment so they didn't have to buy everything on their own and have
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free lessons for teachers on how to use the computer as well.
To conclude
, I consider that quickly learning young
people
may take over others, which may cause an increased poverty in the society. In order to solve the problem,
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needs to take action
such
as financial assistance and accessible information.
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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