Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree and disagree that constantly increasing is an appropriate goal?

So many clothes are produced and
then
thrown away.
This
mentality is adopted for almost every item that people would want to possess. The current society is very materialistic and not at all trying to be minimalistic, which would be a great way of living. But many people think that their
country
should produce more materials and goods. But would that be a good thing to do?
Firstly
, I absolutely disagree with
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current materialism. We all possess too many goods and most of them are not even used
,
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and are just thrown after a while, after realising that they are not needed anymore. But deep inside they knew, it was never needed. The environment would very much
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it if we started living a minimalistic life. The Earth is a closed room. Everything
that is
being produced on
this
planet, stays here. But most of the trash is just being dropped into the oceans, which has giant impacts on
this
wonderful ecosystem,
that is
absolutely not responsible for our consumer behaviour. But on the other
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I agree, that every
country
should be able to produce the things that they need. Local markets would be much more eco-friendly than just getting everything shipped from China,
for example
. That would maybe
also
reduce
this
overproduction
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if every
country
would just be in the capacity to produce the materials they actually need. In conclusion, the materialism on
this
planet is getting worse, which is very bad for the environment. But if the things that are needed by the population would be produced in their own
country
, we could at least reduce the carbon emissions that result from shipping.
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