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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Sharing
information
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 is an actual issue in our world where it has a strong influence on
people
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 . There are various spheres of our life where
information
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 is more or less important for
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 . For
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 reason, some
people
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 consider that it is good to
share
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information
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 while others think in the opposite way .
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share
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information
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 with ordinary
people
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 or other scientists. There is no competition in
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 sphere . Sometimes it is bad for
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 when scientists
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 secret
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 with international spies but it will not hurt
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 . There are some simple rules in
academic
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 world which
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limits
limite
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limit
 informational sources between
people
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 . If
person
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a person
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 is interested in theme
discussing
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 with you and you are ready to keep talking
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 the person gives you all
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what
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 he knows for free .
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 , if the person knows much and he knows that you can not give him actual or new
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then
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 he will
share
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information
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 with you just for money .
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student
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 pay for
his
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their
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 learning while two students can cooperate and
share
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information
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 with each other . It is
obviously
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 that sharing
information
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 in
business
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the business
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 world can
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followed
follow
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followes
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followed
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much
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 costs for companies . Companies
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loose
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lose
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 their profit every day because
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someone
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some one
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someone
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 can not keep
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especially
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 IT companies . To sum up all the above, it is necessary to say that there are some spheres in which
information
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 is a crime . In my opinion , in many cases ,
information
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 can be too sharing important or shared at all .

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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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