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Band 5.5

Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with environment projects in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. In your letter: Describe a local environmental issue that affects you Explain what you would like to do to help Suggest how the problem could be avoided in future.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response to an advertisement in the local newspaper calling for volunteers to participate in environmental protection projects in the area. A serious environmental problem in my area is littering and plastic waste in public parks. It affects me because the polluted environment makes the areas unpleasant and unsafe for residents. I would like to participate in community cleanup activities,
such
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 as collecting trash in parks, along riverbanks and encouraging people to reduce the use of plastic waste to protect the environment.
Besides
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 that, the government should place more trash cans in public areas and organise environmental protection events. We should educate people and children about protecting the environment. I hope you will consider my solution. I look forward to your reply. Sincerely, Van anh

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task
Add a short intro and three clear parts: issue, what you will do, and how to avoid the same problem later.
coherence
Put ideas in separate short paragraphs and use linking words to show the order.
grammar
Check small mistakes like missing comma in a list or a missed 'and' to join items.
content
The letter states a real problem in the area.
content
It shows a plan to help by cleaning and teaching.
tone
The tone is polite and the closing is proper.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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