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Many countries now have people from different cultures and ethnic groups. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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It is nowadays common to see
people
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 of various cultural backgrounds working, and studying in different sectors;
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,
people
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 with different religions and ethnic backgrounds are noticed in many nations across the globe. The major reasons for
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 are mostly migration and exploring a new culture which can be a positive development for many individuals as well as for the country. The migration of
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 from different
countries
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 is more feasible than ever before.
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 can be for various factors: study, work, better life, and weather conditions.
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, many
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 from India travel to
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 like Canada, the United Kingdom, and Australia for their higher studies, and the majority of them settle down for better life.
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 resulted in the development of a society with different cultures and ethnic groups. Another reason for
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 is few
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 like to try different religions based on their beliefs, health, and comfort which results in
people
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 with
a different ethnic groups
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different ethnic groups
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. The growing population of these multicultural societies can have a significant impact on the nation and on individuals.
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, for migrating to a different country students have to pay the huge visa fee, university fee, and tax needed to be paid by working
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.
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 aid in
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' economies.
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,
people
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 who are interested in
practicing
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 a new culture may find themselves stress-free, and excited to learn a new language, its customs, and traditions; thereby creating a positive likelihood for others who like to practice new religion. To conclude, it is undeniable that the growth of different community are on the rise in various
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, which is mainly due to migration and seeking new culture and
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 has a positive impact on both individual and nation. I believe that every citizen should respect others' cultures and ethics and should be welcoming them to practice them without creating cultural-barrier.
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