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Some people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a wedding celebration, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #celebration
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The majority of people believe it is critical to expense a big amount of
money
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prepare for their wedding party , while other people disagree with
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 I completely agree to spend a
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 of
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 to have a memorable
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 I will explain why it is important and draw up my own conclusion .
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, in terms of the positive sides of spending a
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 on a wedding celebration they might had a memorable and great
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 in their life .
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 is because, it is just one
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 in their life and it is crucial for them and for their families and their friends,
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, they should prepare for
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 night very well .
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 , they should select the best place and they
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 should consider the weather carefully and they need to order the best dinner which will definitely cost a
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 of
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 , they need to invite a professional photographer to take some pictures for them to always remember
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day
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 . One example to prove
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 is if they have a great photo on
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day
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 they might save it to show their children in the future .
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 , despite the positive effect of spending huge
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 on a wedding ,celebration there are some drawbacks to
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 situation.
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 , they might not have a suitable budget and if they spend all their
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 they will suffer for entire their life and
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 they can’t have a honeymoon to travel and have an amazing time with each other. The reason behind
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 is, travel has now become more and more expensive and If they spent their
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 on their wedding they can’t travel and see the other world. In conclusion , spending a
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 of
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 on a vital
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 to always remember
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 is completely fine just for rich people and who they are capable for hold the cost .
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