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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main type of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays,
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bags
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 are commonly used in shops or supermarkets and become trouble with water and land pollution. Some suggested that it should be banned to mitigate environmental problems. In my opinion, it could be an effective way to reduce the number of
plastic
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bags
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 and directly prevent the issues of pollution. First of all, the number of
plastic
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bags
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 is enormous and hazardous to the environment. A recent study showed that millions of tons of
plastic
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bags
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 are used in Hong Kong daily since they are indecomposable and contain poisonous components, which could
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 soil contamination.
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, some
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bags
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 or wrapping are thrown into the sea, which could tremendously threaten the ocean habitat.
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 is because those cabbages are mistakenly ingested by fish or turtles; since they cannot digest the plastics,
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,
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 their death. To avoid
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 circumstance, it is important to impose a law to regulate
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 bag usage.
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 there are some considerable policies implemented in some countries
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 imposing a
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 bag tax in Hong Kong, it still has no significant effect on reducing the
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bags
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.
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, it is necessary to use strong measures to control the usage of
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bags
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. Once the law is imposed, it creates incentives for companies or customers to use alternatives to replace
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. In conclusion, the influences of plastics are serious and can no longer turn a blind eye to them, particularly in water and land pollution.
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, strong and strict means should be used which as imposing the law to ban
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bag
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecological impact
  • marine and terrestrial ecosystems
  • decompose
  • wildlife
  • urban waste management
  • clog drainage systems
  • sustainable alternatives
  • reusable cloth bags
  • waste and pollution reduction
  • economic incentives
  • eco-friendly products
  • phased approach
  • public participation
  • compliance
  • public awareness campaigns
  • long-term benefits
  • community support
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