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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

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With the development of the new century, so many inventions have been designed with high technologies,
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 as computer science, so they can modernize the world in a way we have never seen before, which may cause some changes in our daily lives and in the near future.
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 of all, due to people’s demands in society, more and more discoveries are made by scientists, physicians, companies with a higher ambition to change the world, and the governments of many large countries.
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, we expect to have up-to-date and additional devices, tools, and technologies for the future,
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 as spaceships to visit other planets, robots that can help us arrange everything in our dwelling, and a kind of gas we can breathe in. I do believe that we will have more and more equipment to survive in every harsh condition without help from others.
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, what we actually have in the 21st century that has changed humans' lives the most is the smartphone. Recently, people have had a lot of opportunities to meet their families from a distance through video calls, making it more convenient to make international friends and follow the news from other countries. Through the COVID-19 pandemic, I predict that there will be considerable progress in biology where new and effective vaccines will be produced in the
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 20 years, which is necessary for our health. Overall, we have only been through one-fifth of the century, but so many inventions have been created to fashion the world and have many benefits.
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, I am confident that as technology advances and people's needs change, millions of new devices will be developed, bringing more benefits and changes.
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