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The amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

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The pie chart illustrates the revenues and expenditures of children’s charities in the USA in 2016. Overall, It is evident that the revenue
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 are higher than expenditures with little difference. In the income
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, donated foods accounted for 86.6% of all the whole revenues
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, which was eight times higher as compared to the other five
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 together. The
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 contributor was the community which stood at 10.4%. The rest of the services were quite lower as programme revenue (2.2%), while the other three only contributed 0.6% altogether. The total collection was 53,561,580. In the expenses sector, programme services were the department where 95.8% of the money was spent solely on services. On the fundraising events, 2.6% amount was used while 1.6% of the total amount was spent
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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