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In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing cournties. However, those, in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this?

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Economic development has been rapidly growing all around the globe, helping a large number of individuals to increase their financial income. Yet, some of the current rich
people
, living in developed countries, are not as happy as their predecessors. In
this
 essay, I will show some of the reasons for
this
 trend and what can be learnt. The main reason for
people
to be
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 less happy these days is
because
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that
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 their
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 has changed. In the past,
people
 used to
spent
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 more
time
 socializing than being at home; individuals now
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prefer
preffer
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prefer
 to spend their free
time
 at home watching
netflix
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 or playing video games. To justify, it is well known that rich
people
 spend a large amount of
money
 on online games, which
leds
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leads
led
LEDs
 them to be
isoleted
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isolated
 at home investing more
their
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time
 in the game rather than with their friends.
This
 behaviour may give them a feeling of
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happiness
happines
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happiness
 that easily goes away once their computer is off. If
people
 take into account what is happening, they
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might
migth
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might
 be able to avoid that feeling and be
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in
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 what really
matter
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; family and friendship. Human beings are now aware
how
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 fast
money
 can
be earn
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 but spending quality
time
 with family is something that
money
 can not buy.
Also
, it has been
prove
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 that going out with close friends increases the dopamine level in the body, which is the main responsible for the feeling of
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happiness
happines
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happiness
.
Hence
, having
better
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a better
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 social
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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,
accompany
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with
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 a somewhat of
money
, can be extremely relevant when it comes to a cheerful life. To conclude,
although
money
 is becoming easy to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
,
people
 should be
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a focus
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focus
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 on spending quality
time
 with their close family and friend
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instead
insted
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instead
 of being
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 on technological instruments,
such
 as online games.
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