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College students need to be activists in social justice issues like human trafficking. Do you agree or disagree?

#college #students #activists #justice
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Social
issues
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 are usually overlooked by the governments, those
issues
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 can be poverty, hunger or
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 human trafficking. The involvement of
college
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students
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 in social causes is known to have a positive impact on
society
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, in fact, that involvement has brought some social
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 to
society
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 ,
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 I agree
college
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students
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 need to be activists in social
justice
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issues
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 and I will discuss it in the following paragraphs.
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, throughout the year
college
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students
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 participated in social movements to fight for their rights,
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 how everything started. Nowadays, those
students
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 fight for something bigger that goes beyond
college
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 doors and the governments usually hear the voice of those loud
college
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students
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 asking for social
justice
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.
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,
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students
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 fought for their female colleagues to be accepted in the same classroom in the past.
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, the positive impact on
society
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 is immense. The
college
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students
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 in question can help stop human trafficking and in the
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fact the families saved from human trafficking will be thankful and will work towards improving, even more,
society
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. As a matter of ,
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 those families will
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 work more on projects towards social
justice
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 creating a positive snowball effect.
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, it is very important for
college
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students
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 to work together to improve
society
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 and participate in social programs. Those young
students
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 can make a difference in the future by implementing social
justice
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 policies in their area, summing up, I agree that
college
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students
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 need to be activists in social
justice
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issues
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, namely human trafficking or hunger.
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