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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying that travelling continues to increase by
year
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.
People
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 go on
holiday
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 not only in winter but
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 in summer because they can find effortless where can be gone.
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 many
people
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 like holidays, choices can be different from each other. While some humans prefer to go on
holiday
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 in their own
country
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, others like to travel to another
country
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. In the future, believed that more
people
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 will choose their
country
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 for
holiday
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instead
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 of travelling abroad. I totally disagree, countless
people
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 will continue to select other
countries
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 for vacation.
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 with,
people
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 ask for learning about various cultures of the
others
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 community.
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, they want to discover new beauties,
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 as different flowers, animals, strange
history
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histories
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 and dissimilar languages.
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, a man who lives in Scotland has not seen any
country
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 in his life before. He is getting bored day by day. Because he sees the same things,
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 as animals, flowers and
people
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 every day. His
country
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 continues to be attractive.
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, throughout human history,
people
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 have always been in search.
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, the world is getting worse because of the economic situation. Due to
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 reason,
people
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 will choose to stay in their
countries
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 for vacation.
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, some
people
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 consider that travelling abroad is more expensive than staying in their
countries
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. In the future, fewer
people
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 will like to go to foreign
countries
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.
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, humans will not want to waste their money. Having a
holiday
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 in their
countries
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 is more suitable than other choices. In conclusion, even though there is
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 dreadful economic situation in the world,
people
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 still will travel abroad in the future. Because these problems can be dealt with effortlessly.
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, more societies will prefer other
countries
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 for travelling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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  • heritage sites
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