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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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Nowadays
people
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 are getting busier in their life, a plethora of them don’t have enough time to cook at home, as a
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 they tend to buy
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 from restaurants and shops,
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 they waste half of the
food
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 they bought. The following essay will
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 elaborate on the reasons peoples waste
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 and how to mitigate
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 problem in the future.
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 with, early days humans diet were based on a simple meal because the income they earned from jobs and other business was not enough to buy
food
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 from stores and waste, but with the development in the job market
people
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 have plenty of jobs that everybody can afford at least one cuisine from a restaurant.
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,
people
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 have no idea about the amount of
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 they are wasting or buying in order to fulfil their desires.
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, consumers expect their fruits and vegetables in perfect shapes,
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 and
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, but the quest for flawless produce has serious downfalls
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 because there’s a little retail market for ugly fruits and
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, where large quantities of
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 are wasted.
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, to solve these two issues, the government can take the problem into their hands, where authorities can impose high taxes on
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 which are affordable for
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 already.
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 can limit the wastage of cuisines in retail shops and restaurants.
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,
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 should understand that just because
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product looks funky doesn’t mean it’s bad if they don’t want to consume that product there are a plethora of
people
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 who are suffering in the streets without
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, and donating
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 for those won't cost anything. To sum up, half of the population wastes their
food
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 because they earn too much and
people
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 have no idea how much
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 is wasted daily,
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 individuals try to find the perfect
food
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 without flaws. The possible solutions for these problems are the government interacting with the issue and mankind should understand that perfect
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 is not the shape and size of it.
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