Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own coun- try, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people are at
this
belief which is, teaching children our culture rather than other countries. In
this
essay, I will consider the argument between two groups of individuals, and draw a rational conclusion at the end. On one hand, one of the vital things in any person's life is the place they live, grow and learn. Knowing and being familiar with your own culture is not something optional, if you want to be a successful person you have to know the stuff happening in your country.
For instance
, people in Iran do stuff in their workplace which is known and essential, all related to culture.
Also
, we can learn from stuff which happened in the past, by reading ancient literature, studying
history
and never experiencing unpleasant things which occurred in the past. As an illustration, In China, their
history
is full of kings with mistakes which children can learn from.
On the other hand
, there are few people who forget where they belong only by reading other nation's
history
. To exemplify, many students in international schools just forget about their beliefs and important things in their past by being taught foreign
history
.
Last
but not least, parents keep complaining about schools teaching these subjects, as they believe learning about other cultures is the same as invading their houses and what they believe.
For example
, In Afghanistan, a majority of parents kept complaining about teaching these subjects.
As a result
, as I considered the argument between two groups of individuals, I believe children should be taught both foreign and their own past and literature.
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