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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: give details of your visit to the restaurant explain the reason for the celebration say what was good about the food and the service Write at least 150 words. Dear Sir/ Madam,

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I am writing
this
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 letter to appreciate your food and your
service
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 during our visit to your restaurant 'Kelsey's' in commemoration of our very special day of my parent's anniversary. I visited
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Kelseys during the supper meal with my 15 special guests on March 31, 2024. All the guests were welcomed cordially and respectfully. It was my first visit, I loved the interior
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 the exterior of the store as well. Ultimately, the reason for the celebration was my parents' 40th anniversary, I wanted to make
this
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 day special for them.
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, I invited all the special guests and decided to have a fabulous dinner. Honestly, the
service
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 of your restaurant was excellent, as soon as we entered the store, we were grabbed by two ladies, asking for details about how many customers were there and
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 they followed us to our seats and provided us with the menu. We were served delicious food within 30 minutes which was quick. They were readily available if we needed anything else during the meal.
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, they give small gifts to the anniversary couple
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.
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, everyone was pleased with their
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. Your
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 was adorable. I wholeheartedly thank you and your staff. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent tense throughout your letter to enhance clarity. It appears there are shifts between past and present tense.
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Consider rephrasing for clarity in some sentences to improve readability. For instance, 'I visited to Kelseys during the supper meal' could be 'I visited Kelsey's for a dinner meal.',
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To further enrich your letter, you might include specific details about the food itself – what dishes you found impressive and why.
coherence cohesion
You have effectively structured your letter, introducing the reason for your visit and detailing your experience and appreciation clearly.
task achievement
Your letter successfully conveys a tone of gratitude and appreciation towards the restaurant staff, which is suitable for the context of your message.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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