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There are more and more parents working full time. Some people argue that childcare centres are the best in taking care of children of very young age. Others think grandparents are better carer. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#parents #time #people #childcare #centres #care #children #age #grandparents #carer
Nowadays, parents are very occupied, due to long working hours,
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so they
have
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 not a lot of time to spend whit their
children
. The easiest but most expensive solution is using childcare centres.
Unfortunately
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this
 is becoming more and more usual. In fact, in my
opinion
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 nothing is comparable to the real relationship that a child can build with their
grandparents
.
However
 not every couple is lucky enough to have someone inside the family circle, taking care of their
children
. The reasons are several and different.
For
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grandparents
 could be dead, or maybe there are frictions or issues in the relationship whit them,
furthermore
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 their sons may live in other countries or even continents. For
this
 reason, in the latest
decades
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 a new and persistent improving
childcare
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 centres system rose. They are run by very specialised and competent people, who have studied
years
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 to practice their job, and some of them are situated in very technological buildings.
Nevertheless
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 still think that even
such
 a perfect environment can not offset the love and education that can be given by
grandparents
 or other relatives. Even if their educational approach could be worse than a professionalised one. In my opinion, the love that a grandparent is able to gift to his grandson is incomparable to the caring and professional education of a teacher. At the same time, maybe my point of view is influenced by my own experience. As a child that has been grown up by both of his
grandparents
. But I'm sure that I wish
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every child to receive what I've received. In conclusion, I would raccomand to every parent to try leaving their
children
 to their parent's supervision, if it is possible. If
this
 way is not practicable,
children
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 care centres can be a valuable option.
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