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Some believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people tend to spend their free time reading the
books
 or doing some sport. There is widespread opinion that active
pastime
 has more beneficial affect on ones developent rather than readings. Both of the belives have its own arguments, and in
this
 essay I will outline both of them. To start with,
books
 have been light of civilization for centuries, as it is now. Reading
book
 enhance ones generalized knowledge and help one to face difficulties independetly in future.
Book
 gives one oppoortunity to teach on others mistake and enhance once self-confidence. It cant be replaced by any possible activities, and the time shows it too.
For example
: it is concluded that reading
book
 reiase the IQ of human and his inelligent.
Book
 is way to decrease your anxiety and facilitate mental health ,and posses education at the same time.
On the other hand
, society have problems of putting theoritical knolwdge to practise, active
pastime
 can help them to overcome
such
 difficulty. LIke induging to work rather than reading
book
, can be much more beneficial beacuse you practise everything on yourself.
For example
: in 21st century 80% of succesfull people dont have university degree, but they teach from their every day life rather than from the
books
. Working or just socialize with people, may give you acknowldgment which you cant find in the
books
. In conclusion,
pastime
 activities as much as reading
book
, are major factors of ones development, while
books
 give us thoritical knowldge
pastime
 activite teach us how to put
such
 knowldge to practise.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-discipline
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Kinesthetic learning
  • Cognitive development
  • Empathy
  • Resilience
  • Dexterity
  • Analytical skills
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