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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children, Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

#trend #world #couples #children #couple
Married
couple
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 deciding not to have children's trend is increasing.
although
world
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the world
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 is already
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overpopulated
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over populated
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couples
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couples'
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 decision is
accepatable
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acceptable
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couples
feeling
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 lonely
to
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her
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here
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hear
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 old age to
made
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this
 decision. in my opinion
merits
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the merits
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 of
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 notion outnumbered its demerits. there are numerous
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
 of
this
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this couple's decision
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couples
 decision
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particularly
particullarly
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particularly
 for our planet and
it
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 is already
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overpopulated
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over populated
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overpopulated
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 and
this
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 uptrend continues we will suffer
for
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 the competition we are facing unemployment issues
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, for example,
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for example
india
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India
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 and china are
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over populated
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 and these countries are suffering
for
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from
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate we see the other side
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of
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 these
couples
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couple's
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 opinion these
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 cross the age of 40 and they feel loneliness because there is no reason for their life people got bored and hate their lives and
dont
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don't
 know the purpose of life
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