There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children, Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

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Introduction

Married

couple

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deciding not to have children's trend is increasing.

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world

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is already

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overpopulated

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couples

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decision is

accepatable

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acceptable

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lonely

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old age to

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decision. in my opinion

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notion outnumbered its demerits.

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there are numerous

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benefits

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benefits

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this

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this couple's decision

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decision

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particularly

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for our planet and

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is already

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uptrend continues we will suffer

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the competition we are facing unemployment issues

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for example

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india

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and china are

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and these countries are suffering

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unemployment

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rate

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we see the other side

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couples

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opinion these

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cross the age of 40 and they feel loneliness because there is no reason for their life people got bored and hate their lives and

dont

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don't

know the purpose of life

madhavansubase

Nov 15, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

134 words

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goals
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responsibility
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