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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#schools #force #children #language
Along with peace of technological developments, societies have changed to improve. Foreign
language
, especially English is one of the most important tools for people to adapt the changes.
Therefore
, I strongly disapprove of the opinion that foreign
language
 should not be compulsory at school due to its significant merits. The
curricular
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 of schools
have
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 to provide
students
basic
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 knowledge for their life and foreign
language
 is basic
requirements
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requirement
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 in our era of mass communication. Nowadays, there are many specialized documents about any
fields
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field
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 people want to discover on the Internet.
However
, most of them are written in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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, particularly English. If schools don’t teach English
for
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students
,
students
 can hardly make out these materials to self-study as well as improve themself.
Furthermore
, without learning
oversea
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an oversea
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language
,
young
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the young
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 generation
which
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 will build the country can not communicate with foreign people for granted.
As a result
, the slow development of the country will be inevitable in the future. To put it briefly I believe, only when learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 is forced at schools do
students
 improve themselves as well as the country in the future.
Besides
, it is
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advised
adviced
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advised
 that undergraduates should study
language
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a language
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 not only at school but
also
 on the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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