Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Along with peace of technological developments, societies have changed to improve. Foreign
language
, especially English is one of the most important tools for people to adapt the changes.
Therefore
, I strongly disapprove of the opinion that foreign
language
should not be compulsory at school due to its significant merits. The
curricular
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of schools
have
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to provide
students
basic
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knowledge for their life and foreign
language
is basic
requirements
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in our era of mass communication. Nowadays, there are many specialized documents about any
fields
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field
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people want to discover on the Internet.
However
, most of them are written in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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, particularly English. If schools don’t teach English
for
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students
,
students
can hardly make out these materials to self-study as well as improve themself.
Furthermore
, without learning
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language
,
young
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generation
which
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will build the country can not communicate with foreign people for granted.
As a result
, the slow development of the country will be inevitable in the future. To put it briefly I believe, only when learning
foreign
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language
is forced at schools do
students
improve themselves as well as the country in the future.
Besides
, it is
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advised
adviced
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advised
that undergraduates should study
language
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not only at school but
also
on the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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