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MENU Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

#menu #people #pets #children #options
The companion for humans for ages was
animals
, they have used them for protection, hunting, farming and as
pets
, and in
return
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 humans provided
animals
 with shelter and food. People having
pets
had
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have
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 better mental
health
 and
phsychiatrists
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psychiatrists
 urge people with
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psychological
physiological
physycological
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psychological
 disorders like depression to have a pet.
Children
on the other hand
 enjoy the companionship of
animals
, it motivates
children
 to play and do activities with
pets
. Taking care of an animal could have a positive impact on the child's personality by teaching him how to be responsible for it and fulfilling its needs. The opposite opinion suggests that
,
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the
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children
 could be harmed by
pets
 by diseases that are transmitted by
animals
 and sometimes wild reactions from
animals
 like biting which can cause serious
health
 issues. The
others
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 important
health
 problem is that some
children
 can be allergic
from
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 certain
animals
 and
this
 can cause a range of immune
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reactions
rections
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reactions
 some could be simple and curable but rarely can be
life threatening
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. In
general
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pets
 are loved by
children
 and
gives
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give
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 them joy and happiness, but parents have to always take care of the animal's vaccine and hygiene and be
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alert
allert
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alert
 for any
health
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issues
isuues
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issues
 with the animal and their
children
.
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