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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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At present, our lives are much more complex than the generation of our parents.
Hence
 it is common to see many suffering from stress-related problems and the number is on the continuous rise. For
such
 cases, the main reason is the
time
 factor.
Therefore
 to overcome
this
, it is essential to educate society on
time
 management. Today we have many responsibilities to cater
at
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 our workplaces within a very short period of
time
. So all are hurried and running to complete their duties.
As a result
 of it, most
of
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the
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people have to
work
 after hours and even at the weekends while limiting the
time
 to spend with their families or loved ones or spending some
time
 on an activity where they can enjoy. An example of
such
 a case is my superior working at the
office
. He is always under immense pressure due to
office
work
 and even takes medication to overcome the stress. To eliminate
this
 dangerous situation it is a must
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educate people on effective
time
 management strategies and be aware of balancing
work
 and life. These measures will help to educate society and to make their lives more comfortable while fulfilling duties at their offices. As an example, many in society have started to complete their
office
work
 within
office
time
 and go to public places to enjoy themselves after
office
 hours. In conclusion, stress-related issues are very common in the modern world mainly due to
time
 constraints.
However
, I believe it is easy to overcome
this
 while managing themselves properly and efficiently.
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