IN SOME COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE ADULTS ARE CONTINUING TO LIVE WITH PARENTS EVEN AFTER COMPLETING THEIR EDUCATION AND GETTING JOBS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWIEGH DISADVANTAGES.

Children
's love for their
parents
is a
naturaly
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naturally
gifted entity and has withstood the test of
time
. Some people believe that the
trend
of adults residing with their
parents
even after they have fulfilled their studies and started their careers has escalated over
time
. From my
perspective
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this
trend
has plenty of but a few side effects as well. On the one hand, there are a variety of positive sides
of
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living in a joint family system.
Firstly
, at the
time
when adults finish their studies and secure jobs,
parents
needs
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them the most for their
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assistance
assitance
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assistance
.
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is
the
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crucial
time
for the
children
to support them both financially and physically.
For example
, they need assistance in house chores
such
as
,
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washing, shopping, cooking and sometimes even feeding.
Secondly
, serving
parents
later in their
life
gives us a feeling of satisfaction and
proudness
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. Which in turn leads to a friendly environment for our kids.
Thirdly
, it is a common observation that minors living in
an undivided families
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tends
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to be more social and interactive. Which is very pivotal for their upcoming practical
life
.
In other
words
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children
staying with a variety of family members tends to be loving, caring, boldly communicating and have
less
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behavioral
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issues.
On the other hand
,
this
trend
have
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a few drawbacks as well.
To begin
with,
personal
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life
of both
the
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individual is compromised which is currently a very debatable issue.
For
instance
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arguing among different family members
sometime
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make the environment very uncomfortable and disturbed for the other members of the family.
Moreover
, spending
life
with elders turns
children
to become dependent. To elaborate
the
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point,
majority
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of individuals who depends on their
parents
do not progress in their
life
without
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of the elder resulting in their lagging in future
life
. To sum up,
although
this
trend
have
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few
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negative sides, in my opinion living with
parents
have
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a
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way more pros than living separately. It helps in establishing a strong relationship with the elders as well as with the
children
.
Therefore
, it should be encouraged.
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