IN SOME COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE ADULTS ARE CONTINUING TO LIVE WITH PARENTS EVEN AFTER COMPLETING THEIR EDUCATION AND GETTING JOBS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWIEGH DISADVANTAGES.
Children
's love for their parents
is a naturaly
gifted entity and has withstood the test of Correct your spelling
naturally
time
. Some people believe that the trend
of adults residing with their parents
even after they have fulfilled their studies and started their careers has escalated over time
. From my perspective
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,perspective
this
trend
has plenty of but a few side effects as well.
On the one hand, there are a variety of positive sides of
living in a joint family system. Change preposition
to
Firstly
, at the time
when adults finish their studies and secure jobs, parents
needs
them the most for their Change the verb form
need
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assistance
assitance
. Correct your spelling
assistance
This
is the
crucial Correct article usage
a
time
for the children
to support them both financially and physically. For example
, they need assistance in house chores such
as,
washing, shopping, cooking and sometimes even feeding. Remove the comma
apply
Secondly
, serving parents
later in their life
gives us a feeling of satisfaction and proudness
. Which in turn leads to a friendly environment for our kids. Replace the word
pride
Thirdly
, it is a common observation that minors living in an undivided families
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an undivided family
undivided families
tends
to be more social and interactive. Which is very pivotal for their upcoming practical Change the verb form
tend
life
. In other
words
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,words
children
staying with a variety of family members tends to be loving, caring, boldly communicating and have less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
behavioral
issues.
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behavioural
On the other hand
, this
trend
have
a few drawbacks as well. Change the verb form
has
To begin
with, personal
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the personal
life
of both the
individual is compromised which is currently a very debatable issue. Correct article usage
apply
For
instance
arguing among different family members Add a comma
,instance
sometime
make the environment very uncomfortable and disturbed for the other members of the family. Replace the word
sometimes
Moreover
, spending life
with elders turns children
to become dependent. To elaborate the
point, Change preposition
on the
majority
of individuals who depends on their Correct article usage
the majority
parents
do not progress in their life
without support
of the elder resulting in their lagging in future Add an article
the support
life
.
To sum up, although
this
trend
have
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has
few
negative sides, in my opinion living with Correct article usage
a few
parents
have
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has
a
way more pros than living separately. It helps in establishing a strong relationship with the elders as well as with the Correct article usage
apply
children
. Therefore
, it should be encouraged.Submitted by drsanaghani on
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