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You have joined a sports club recently. You are having some problems. Write to the manager and include this information. 1) Explain why you joined this club 2) Tell your problems 3) Give solutions

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you in order to give my feedback about the facilities that made me feel uncomfortable at the centre that you manage and my suggestions to fix them. Recently, I joined the Spartak gym club, due to the fact that I want to stay healthy and active. As a person, who trains constantly and tried many sorts of sports activities, I prefer to take cardio and fitness classes. I must confess that the receptionist was very polite and gave me a grand tour of the building. My trainer is very professional, and we follow a plan that was designed by her. I visit classes on Tuesday, and Thursday from 07.30 p.m. to 08.30 p.m. and on Saturday at 09.00 p.m. respectively. Unfortunately recently I've noticed that the cleaning has become very low and I sence a smell coming from a particular part where stairs are located. As you know the space in the centre is quite small and on Saturdays you get a huge number of customers coming. As a ,result many people create congestion in the place, which creates an unbearable environment to train. I would like to suggest a few solutions to the problems.
Firstly
, the number of housekeepers should be increased and more control must be taken over their shifts.
Secondly
, you can limit the number of members who train at the same time.
Consequently
, it will resolve the traffic issue. I hope my feedback will make a positive difference in the future. Thanks in advance for your attention and feel free to contact me if you have any questions. Kind regards, Laman Ahmadova
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Facilities: amenities or spaces provided for certain activities.
  • - Equipment: Tools or items used to perform specific tasks or sports.
  • - Maintenance: The upkeep or repair of facilities and equipment.
  • - Uncooperative: Not willing to work or assist others.
  • - Untrained: Lacking necessary training or skills.
  • - Feedback: Comments or suggestions for improvement.
  • - Accommodate: Make or have space for; to meet the needs of.
  • - Professionalism: The competence or skill expected of a professional.
  • - Recommend: To suggest a course of action.
  • - Wellness: The state of being in good health.
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